Thursday, April 28, 2011

Essay Revision

                When Parents become afflicted with disease or have problem supporting families

financially, children’s are forced to become breadwinner of the family with no choices of their own.

We grow and learn from parents to develop our personality and fulfill our basic needs. When it

comes to parent’s children role reversal, it brings several negative effects and some positive effects.

3 comments:

  1. you use a funnel introduction. It is very clear and readable.

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  2. Thats a funnel? I didnt know that

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  3. I don't know it's funnel. I couldn't catch which one enter more deeper, but it's clear for me to read.

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